tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9113459088262891680.post2755209762571756088..comments2023-10-30T09:45:16.159-06:00Comments on Writing on the Wall: Monday Mania--Query LetterPrecision Editing Grouphttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17054725687044240043noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9113459088262891680.post-73387184939366175132011-05-18T00:33:05.726-06:002011-05-18T00:33:05.726-06:00Your efforts are inspiring, but I got lost trying ...Your efforts are inspiring, but I got lost trying to decipher the difference between your volunteer efforts and the theme of the book. It just wasn't clear to me. Maybe, just focus on the central theme of your manuscript. Your personal stuff would be great in your bio. Best of luck!Lisahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00203893525713482889noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9113459088262891680.post-79492402867282094582011-05-17T09:42:50.347-06:002011-05-17T09:42:50.347-06:00While this sounds interesting I have to admit I go...While this sounds interesting I have to admit I got lost reading the query. It's hard but it has to be kept short.<br /><br />Focus on the story itself. Is it essential to know the background of when/why the book was written, or the background of the organization, to understand the book? If it is, keep it to the must-have info. If not, it should probably go.<br /><br />Good luck!Rebecca McKinnonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17310276170780281950noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9113459088262891680.post-90764228721576697032011-05-16T20:09:19.654-06:002011-05-16T20:09:19.654-06:00The book sounds fascinating, but I think you could...The book sounds fascinating, but I think you could cut your querry letter in half, at least. Pare out all the extra verbage. Just be straightforward and direct. Your meaning often gets garbled among too many words.<br /><br />For starters, were you afraid OF your friend or FOR her? And then, who is the book about??? Your friend or you?Ellyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00025004588632265160noreply@blogger.com