Critique Archive #56
One of our readers has submitted a query for critique. Please offer only constructive comments.
Dear XXXX,
We usually think of amnesia resulting from an accident or
other incident. But what if your brain did it all on its own?
My novel The Naked Wolf
is based on my real struggle with Post Traumatic Stress Disorder and
disassociation, which I developed through a life-threatening experience.
In The Naked Wolf,
Angie and Adam connect through similar emotional wounds. Adam is a Special Forces
combat veteran who raises wolves. Because they’ve been through similar
experiences, he recognizes a kindred spirit in Angie. While Adam helps Angie
past her fear of men and sex, she falls desperately in love with him and is certain
he feels the same—until he tells her he’s planning on moving and rejoining the
military. Assuming he’s breaking up with her, Angie has a panic attack. Her
brain shuts off and erases him from her memory. Maybe even worse, her brain
creates a replacement for Adam. What starts out as a dream becomes a nightmare
for them both, and one that is destined to end in tragedy.
An excerpt of this novel was published in Touchstones literary magazine and won 2nd
place in their prose publication contest. A short story of mine Married Dating was also published in Touchstones, where it won 1st place. I’ve
been a freelance journalist for St.
George Neighborhoods and a staff writer for the Hurricane Valley Journal.
Thank you for your time
and consideration. As your website suggests, I have included the first two
chapters.
Sincerely,
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