Critique Archive #56
One of our readers has submitted a query for critique. Please offer only constructive comments.
We usually think of amnesia resulting from an accident or other incident. But what if your brain did it all on its own?
My novel The Naked Wolf is based on my real struggle with Post Traumatic Stress Disorder and disassociation, which I developed through a life-threatening experience.
In The Naked Wolf, Angie and Adam connect through similar emotional wounds. Adam is a Special Forces combat veteran who raises wolves. Because they’ve been through similar experiences, he recognizes a kindred spirit in Angie. While Adam helps Angie past her fear of men and sex, she falls desperately in love with him and is certain he feels the same—until he tells her he’s planning on moving and rejoining the military. Assuming he’s breaking up with her, Angie has a panic attack. Her brain shuts off and erases him from her memory. Maybe even worse, her brain creates a replacement for Adam. What starts out as a dream becomes a nightmare for them both, and one that is destined to end in tragedy.
An excerpt of this novel was published in Touchstones literary magazine and won 2nd place in their prose publication contest. A short story of mine Married Dating was also published in Touchstones, where it won 1st place. I’ve been a freelance journalist for St. George Neighborhoods and a staff writer for the Hurricane Valley Journal.
Thank you for your time and consideration. As your website suggests, I have included the first two chapters.